How does it sound to you? desi xxx Examples: then instead of than (they actually have different meanings); “grab my hand” instead of “grabbed my hand”; “pushes me gentle back” should be “pushes me gently back”. I usually spend 25% writing and 75% editting. I got so tired of translating what you said, into what you must have meant, that I lost interest in the story.senorlongoReport 2011-03-04 23:40:28I have several stories on this site and I’m glad to pass along some of what I have learned from experience. How does it sound to you? Examples: then instead of than (they actually have different meanings); “grab my hand” instead of “grabbed my hand”; “pushes me gentle back” should be “pushes me gently back”. However, I loved the theme and the characters. 7 s«12»anonymous readerReport 2011-03-19 14:41:38I’ll agree with the fact that your grammar effected your story. The few errors did not distract enough to make the story less intriguing.
