You tried to fill every sentence with as many words as you could – as if you were being paid by the word. 1 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 10:41:06I thought that this story was FAR too verbose. xxx desi I was not impressed by your overly-flowery style. 1 s«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-09-14 10:41:06I thought that this story was FAR too verbose. You tried to fill every sentence with as many words as you could – as if you were being paid by the word. You tried to fill every sentence with as many words as you could – as if you were being paid by the word. I was not impressed by your overly-flowery style. Descriptive is good but you went way too far. Watch your excessive use of commas – you inserted some where they did not belong. To me, it made you appear very young and immature.«1»
