Thank you.Report 2009-05-03 17:40:27Very good…made me cum. xxx desi needs to be a little longer on the sexual part..Vanion_3000Report 2009-03-01 20:35:03For a first attempt, well done. However, a little more build up to the actual rape would be good. Thank you.Report 2009-05-03 17:40:27Very good…made me cum. However, a little more build up to the actual rape would be good. One suggestion though, split the paragraphs with a line break between them. Thank you.Report 2009-05-03 17:40:27Very good…made me cum. However, a little more build up to the actual rape would be good. One suggestion though, split the paragraphs with a line break between them. 7 s«12»READERReport 2009-10-14 10:20:44not bad for a first…shorten the paragraghs..easier to read that way, and please, a little more character development and backgroundReport 2009-08-25 17:03:32Good story. needs to be a little longer on the sexual part..Vanion_3000Report 2009-03-01 20:35:03For a first attempt, well done. One suggestion though, split the paragraphs with a line break between them. Thank you.Report 2009-05-03 17:40:27Very good…made me cum. Thank you.Report 2009-05-03 17:40:27Very good…made me cum. needs to be a little
